Blog Post #35 - Revised Conclusion

For this blog I will be rewriting my conclusion from my Project 2 Draft.

digicia. "Snowy Horses". 1/29/2004. via Flickr
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So Here's to a New End
Once again, I'm not entirely certain that the new conclusion is more successful than its predecessor. I believe I have covered the thesis more completely than I did with the original. I also think I was able to add more of a "picture" about the author, text and future than I did with the first. I would love to receive some feedback from my peers as to which is actually the better ending.


ORIGINAL CONCLUSION

            Without trying to overtly persuade the reader, the text accomplishes it covertly. The style and tone set by the author reminds us of an information paper. She has flawlessly brought together multiple sides of an issue and informed the audience without any bias. Combined with the emotional appeal felt through cultural values the reader is left wanting to bring about change without ever being asked to do so. This is the epitome of rhetoric. Getting your audience to do something or feel something without actually asking them to.

REVISED CONCLUSION

            Getting your audience to do something or feel a certain way without asking them to is the epitome of rhetoric. This analysis has shown how an author can use rhetorical strategy to build a rapport with an audience. By focusing on appealing to logic and credibility through outside sources, the author has removed herself from the text. In doing so, the audience feels they are listening to industry experts and respected organizations instead of a random journalist. Using cultural values and beliefs to her advantage, Pia Catton was able to remove herself from the issue of whipping and relate the information as an unbiased broker. Though the issue is far from being completely resolved, the road ahead has been made clearer to us all.