Blog Post #46 - Paraphrasing a Source

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For this blog post I will be choosing a specific passage from my source documents and paraphrasing it.

ORIGINAL

While the new rule has been developed over a period of time, it comes less than two months after Triple Crown-winning jockey Victor Espinoza was fined $300 for his use of the whip on Stella Wind during her 5 1/4-length victory in the Santa Anita Oaks (gr. I). Espinoza also was criticized for the number of times he used the whip on American Pharoah during the eventual Triple Crown winner's victory in the Kentucky Derby Presented by Yum! Brands (gr. I). No action was taken as a result of the Derby ride after it was deemed Espinoza's actions were permissible under Kentucky rules.

link: http://www.bloodhorse.com/horse-racing/articles/92813/california-implements-new-whip-rule


MY PARAPHRASE

The new rule comes on the heels of Victor Espinoza being fined for his use of the whip during the Santa Anita Oaks. Espinoza was also criticized over his use of the whip during the Kentucky Derby which was not in violation of that state's rules.